Nice
Its great! But like the other 2 i have to agree with the transistions. I would also recomend some build ups. The Kick build ups are great! But you can try Snares and Hi hats And make it longer. I love how you used the Crash.
The melodys were nice as well. Keep up the awesome work man.
If this is really your first song then you definately took your time. I like how you used the mixer... Love the beat and melody man.
If you got MSN then PM me. Maybe me can collab sometime.
B Tech